The BROMO Scenario Writing Contest – TIME to VOTE!

sanfv says:

I know who wrote number 2. Darling, I can tell because the language and references match your posts. Also, most people don’t read and thus don’t know how to do linebreaks or properly format dialogue.
It was shady, and I thought it was charming.

As for your dialogue, please indent when a new person speaks. Unless it’s consistent, always have the attributes after the dialogue.

Flush the concept of fugitive and fleeing out more. What does it mean to be on the lam, the danger? What is at stakes in an unknown future?

W/a is a no-no, should say “with out”.

You’re also trusting your reading to know what the models look like. Show us, don’t tell us what they look like.

Try something like this!

“Tattoos of different times, different places were on Sebatsian’s thirty five year old stomach. Jeremy touched his abs, tracing his large digits across each crevice, feeling the stone like muscles but also the tenderness that comes from a stint in prison.”

“Vadim’s eyes turned green with envy as he looked at the wallet. Red was said to be the color of mans fall, green was the color of mans redemption. Vadim thought to the scams of the past, the PayPal, the Skype shows. Where had all the green gone? As he stared at the penis before him, Katelin in Florida boarded a ship to Puerto Rico, and as Vadim accepted Young’s penis into his anus, Katelin accepted a nameless Latin youth into her. Vadim had never pleasured her in the ways a young man should. She forgot about that warm touch from a strong hand on her inner thigh. Her vagina quivers and moistened. She considered this forbidden.They did not share the same language but Katelin and the namless youth shared their true names, their true selves in a bed on the second floor of the hotel. And while she came to climax for the first time in her life, hundreds of miles away as her fiancé Vadim was being mounted, Vadim’s penis ejaculated to climax without touching himself. The distant climax here was distant jealousy. Vadim’s body and libido had synched with Katelin’s. They were one and where not one at the same time.”

Something like that.

Scrapple says:

November 10, 2016 at 7:40 pm

I can’t. You have me reaching for the oxygen tank like the mother in Poison Ivy.

Now I’m trying to figure out the creator.

sanfv says:

November 10, 2016 at 7:45 pm

Damn girl, that write up and read was so good I should win the prize!

Look at it long enough and you’ll see who it is ;)

Scrapple says:

November 10, 2016 at 7:58 pm

It’s tough, because there are several stunt queens who I think would birth something like that. Is there a ‘K’ Vanna?

No_No_No_Yes says:

November 10, 2016 at 8:51 pm

See THAT is setting a stage. THAT is how someone draws you into a scene. You really should win the prize, Men should just fire everyone and let us fix it.

No_No_No_Yes says:

November 10, 2016 at 8:48 pm

I’m smitten. Sneaky bitch.. you have a beautiful mind.

gaycockluvr says:

November 10, 2016 at 9:06 pm

“Two jocks (Vadim Black and Jer….”
That’s about all I read of any of these lol

Scrapple says:

Ho to the…E to the…

Which version of Becky you going as, Lecy Goranson or Sarah Chalke?

Quinton Jackson says:

November 10, 2016 at 9:35 pm

Definitely, Sarah Chalke. But then i’m trashy so i’ll probably go as Jaime Pressly.

Scrapple says:

November 10, 2016 at 10:11 pm

I agree with both of those life choices.